Tell+Me+Ma+Examples+'07-08

toc Students from grade 6 Lang A (07-08) were asked to model these stanzas

The boys won't leave the girls alone They pull my hair, they stole my comb, And that's all right till I go home**
 * I'll tell me ma when I go home


 * She is handsome, she is pretty,**
 * She is the belle of Belfast city,**
 * She is courtin' one, two, three,**
 * Please won't you tell me who is she?**

All the boys are fighting for her. They rap at the door and they ring at the bell, Saying 'Oh, my true love are you well?' Out she comes as white as snow, Rings on her fingers, bells on her toes, Jenny Murphy says she'll die, If she doesn't get the fellow with the roving eye.**
 * Albert Mooney says he loves her,

These are their results:

DWL
“My Everyday”

Tick tock 6:10 clock wakes my mom Tick tock tick tock 6:30 I wake me up, Tick tock 6:40 my sister is up, Everyday the sun is rising.

Chorus

Starting fresh in the forenoon Having a fun in the afternoon Spend neatly in the evening Day by day we enjoy our living.

I go to school hearing bird’s song everyday, I study hard concentrating everyday, Whenever teacher praises me, I am proud of myself, So I always do my best, Tick tock tick tock 12 o’clock Yummy lunch makes me grow up Though I am sometimes tired of school days, I’ll do best for my future days.

Chorus

On the way home I have a nap When I return home, mom hugs me After I have done homework, organize my bag neatly I take a shower and sweep my body cleanly In sweet-smelling blanket I think my whole day Even if every day is same day, I know dream comes true if I do my best everyday. Chorus

Reflection: It was really hard to me because the words did not rhyme well but I tried hard. It was still fun and good memory to make a poem by myself.

EBP

 * Denmark**

This wonderful place I call my home The nice place looks just like old Rome The place I enjoy, the place I love Like an angel on it’s way up above

It’s so pretty, it’s oh so great Please go or it will be much too late It’s so glorious two, three, four Please wouldn't you tell me more and more?

Everyone says this place is great Everyone is hoping to see this lovely state They scream to go and yell so you hear Saying ‘oh please let me go and cheer To this country they may go, To this lovely queen they may see so Frederik Rasmussen says you’ll die, If you don’t see this beautiful place and pretty guy

It’s so pretty, it’s oh so great Please go or it will be much too late It’s so glorious two, three, four Please wouldn't you tell me more and more?


 * Reflection**

I think I did a pretty good job on this poem. Even though I think it is very hard making a poem with a special rhythm in. I also think it was really funny to do this poem. I found out that even though made a really good sentence you might have to make some changes in the sentence, but it was ok. I would like to this again sometime.

EJO

 * Play with…**


 * I play with friends when I go out**
 * We run and chase and dance about**
 * The sun shines and wind blows**
 * It’s time to have fun everyone knows**


 * __Chorus__**
 * She is happy, she is joyful**
 * When she dances she is graceful**
 * She is funny one, two, three**
 * Please won’t you tell me who is she?**

Saying 'Oh I like this game so much!' Out the ball comes out as fast, Play on her hands, kicks on the ball Jenny Murphy says she'll play, If she dosen't get playing with her friendly friends**
 * Albert Mooney says he likes it**
 * All the boys are fighting for it**
 * They kick at the ball and throw at the ball

__Reflection:__ I think I mostly repeated the same words from the poem I'll Tell Me Ma.

JHK
Earphone

Verse1) I like to listen every song So I put ear phone one day long Now I can’t hear every song This problem made my ear wrong

Chorus) It was sad, it was panic It was big problem to me I was stuffy every day Please who can fix my disability?

Verse2) My mother said that I should see a doctor But I know there is scary doctor So I tried to escape but I couldn't escape So I just preyed for my impossible hope The doctor wasn't scary so much Like the cartoon that I already watch However, he fixed my disability~ It was very happy day...

Chorus) It was sad, it was panic It was big problem to me I was stuffy every day Please who can fix my disability?

Reflection: My poem doesn't make a good story because I was concentrated to the rhymes. And I got ideas from the hospital when I was really young and watched some scary things about doctor. It was very fun and I want to make more good poem in the next time. I would like to do this again!!

KSR
My friends call me dictionary They also say I’m not ordinary When they ask me a word or so I tell them that I have no boundary

I like to read a very thick book And I always take a careful look When I find a word that’s odd Then I’d love to hook it out

My family says I’m very cool And lets me sit on a sheet of wool Some people try and use me as a tool But I do have some my own rule When I’m tired I go to a swimming pool And play with my friends with no other rule Sometimes they recite that I’m so cool


 * Reflection: I think I did my best on this piece of work. Somehow the topic shot through my head and I began working on this poem. However, I think I didn’t do very well on rhyming the words, so I would do better on that whenever I have another chance.**

MH
Lovely Rain Gray clouds set in and steal the sun All the nice children end their fun They have been waiting oh so long And now they can begin their song

Chorus “The rain falls down and down and down Then everyone’s frowns turn upside-down The children sing and laugh and smile And ask, 'may I stay out a while'”

Lisa Brown learns etiquette But when the rain comes she forgets She prances just like a wild squirrel And then she twirls ‘till the world’s a whirl She holds boys' hands and twirl around Until they seem to fly from the ground She goes back home soaking wet With me’mries she will never forget

Chorus

As the water drops pitter down Everyone dances just like a clown Thunder claps and lightning bolts But everyone laughs and no one jolts The clouds steadily fall away They’ll come back on another day The children hang their heads and whine Then march back home all in a line

Reflection

I think I did really well. I don't really know how the topic came up to me, but it was in my head like that all the sudden. the poem came to me really quick, so I had it done in about 10 minutes. Rhymes just come to me really naturally. I would really like to do this again.

SWC
Computer Games I like to play computer games But mother won’t leave me play the game I will play when mother doesn’t see If she sees me I will die
 * Verse 1**


 * Chorus**
 * She is angry, she is scary**
 * She is the king of our family**
 * She is coming one, two, three**
 * She will be shouting loud at me**

She will talk to me in kind way But I won’t care and keep playing After few times she will say that “I’ll through your computer away Then I will turn computer off I will start doing my homework When I finish my school homework I will start playing games again
 * Verse 2**


 * Chorus**
 * She is angry, she is scary**
 * She is the king of our family**
 * She is coming one, two, three**
 * She will be shouting loud at me**

I am not very happy with this poem because it doesn’t rhyme. At first I made it so it would rhyme. But when I started making I found that it doesn’t make sense. So I tried and tried and decided to make poem that doesn’t Rhyme. I used Rhyme Zone but it didn’t help me so much. But still I think it is good source. Next time I will really think hard and try to make it rhyme so it will sound better.
 * Reflection**

SWY
I Like To Play Sports

I like to play sports as hobby. I also like to play friendly. We play friendly, can't be greedy. And that's why sports shold be fair played.

Chorus Sports are hard, but how fun it is? Do you know how famous it is? People say how fun it is! Please can you tell how fun it is.

Many people love so much sports. People now play a lot of sports. They are calling more people for fun sports. Many people the come for fun sports. I'm read to go have fun sports. Wear sports shoes and also sports T-shirts. If you are ready, let's play sports. And let's just play sports right now even though there are dirts.

Chorus

My Reflection: When I was making this my own poem, I was taking a lot of care on the rhyming. When I was caring a lot of rhyming, I was thinking very much. I took a lot of challenging time with the rhythms also. But, now I've tried mine which is something that's hard to do, the poem. So I am kind of feeling comfortable on making own poem.

TM
I like to play soccer so much It hurts to be shot in the crouch. I like soccer because its fun Though, I'm sad when the game is done

Like our flag I am red and white I am called the Danish dynamite I think I rock, one, two and three But please would you tell this to me

The Danish team is good and fast Sadly they always finish last That bit of luck everyone needs Is always missing for the Danish team Though in 1992 we had the luck We won the European Championship cup Now the luck is gone And we are seeking it all along

Reflection: When I started to make this poem, I needed to find a topic to write about and I love to play soccer so of course my poem should be about soccer. It was really hard to get it to rhyme so I got my mom and big brother to help me. So after about 30 minutes maybe 45, I had a really good poem in my opinion. Though I had some places where it didn’t rhyme and did not have a good way of saying it because you needed words some places and it looked really weird so I worked more on it and then after 1 hour I had a nearly perfect poem.

VB
A Fat Cat

Verse 1 I saw a cat which sat on a mat He is fat and was chasing a bat He ate mold and he was old If he doesn’t watch out he will be sold

Chorus He is fat, he is bad He is the king of being mad He is cool 1, 2, 3 Please won’t you tell me who is he

Verse 2 Everybody thinks he’s cute But I think he’s not that cute He is funny and he is mean And he likes eating beans Out he comes as black coal Mold on his fingers and holding a bowl Victor says he’s not that smart Because he looks like stupid Bart

Chorus He is fat, he is bad He is the king of being mad He is cool 1, 2, 3 Please won’t you tell me who is he

Reflection It was very hard for me to do this Poem because I am not that good in poems or rhyming. I worked very hard on this poem and I think it is anaverage poem

WZ

 * Puppy**
 * I like puppies cause they're so cute!**
 * They also likes to eat some fruit**
 * Their so furry and their not mute**
 * And they are always very toot**
 * Chorus**
 * It is so cute, it’s so witty**
 * It is the cutest of Beijing city**
 * It is pretty’ one, two, three,**
 * Please can you take me go to see?**


 * Albert Moony says he loves her,**
 * All the boys are fighting for her**
 * They went to the shop, and they look at the pup**
 * Saying “Oh my puppy where’s your cup”**
 * Then the puppy start to smile**
 * Cloth on her body, toys in a pile**
 * Shopkeeper says that he’ll die**
 * If everybody come to look not buy**
 * Chorus**

Summery Writing a poem to me is very hard and sometimes it is kind of hard to find a word that rhyms with the other word. I still did try my best to write this poem. I wrote about a puppy is because I like puppies very much and I even want to get one soon!
 * Let the wind and the rain and the hail blow high**
 * And the snow come shoveling from the sky**
 * She’s as nice as brownie cake**
 * And she’ll get its owner by and by**
 * When she gets a owner of its own**
 * She won’t have to stay in the old pet store**
 * Let them all come as they will**
 * But it’s Albert Moony she love still**