Red+Red+Rose+Examples

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 * The following are examples of student writing modelled from "A Red, Red Rose" with a self-reflection and collaboration.**

I.
A Beating, Blind Love Poem By Tiel

My love is like a beating heart, That will never start to stop. My love is as obvious to see, As if on the table top.

But will they who see really see? For there vision is not true, For they have not held you near, As my heart and soul do.

And if they seek to see, my dear, And steel you and take you far, No matter where you are I’m near: For ever one we are.

And now hear me love of mine: From the heart of my soul to you, Hear me this last time, love of mine: I will never depart from you.

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II.
My Sick Love friend of a socksboy, DJC

I am waiting here like a lonely tree; My love, just like an approaching sunshine Gives me too much light that I am about to Give off the nutrients of mine

But how is the reality! That I can just receive like a foolish Black hole. O dear! I can’t bear the pain Then an appropriate word for this problem: Banish!

I want to be banished from the reality But how? In my dream? No, never! Oh…but the time will eventually come When I would sleep forever….

To sleep forever, on my comfortable bed How can I wait till the time When I would relief the rising, shining sun Then, I would rely on the time

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III.
Sunset Love J.H.C

O my Luve's like the sunset sky, That's as red as my heart: O my Luve's like the water, That's as clear as my love.

As I can't forget you, never, I miss you all day: I will only love thee, my Dear, Till a' my life ruin away.

Till a' my life ruin away, my Dear, And the salty sea gets pure: I will only luve thee, my Dear, While my heart turns lure.

I now let you leave, my Luve! And never forget the souvenir! And we'll meet again, my Luve, Tho' it is the greatest danger!

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IV.
// O my Luve, The crazy taxi Hey, Try to go more fast O my Luve, Please don’t stop the race Hey, Cry to be the best
 * //Crazy Taxi//
 * //**By:SGC**

Hey Luve Send me to hospital My heart is Breaking down Hey Luve, Please come here and cure me My heart is Breaking down

I am tired, Can you not see? O my Luve, Stop here please I am tired, Come and see me O my Luve, I Will leave

O now I have to leave, bye bye I wish, You miss, my kiss When we meet again say hi hi MY LUVE, CRAZY TAXI

//__Comments: __// //Coool~ your poem is so funny!!! But.. it doesn't really rhyme.. Other than that, It really good~ps. Was it the driver you loved or the girl who was on the taxi?// -Pebbles

//Awww... This is so sweet, in a (nice) weird way. Did you fall in love with a car? Or the driver? Whichever it is, it's funny. ^^ Watch you're rhyming though, despite the good job in the rhythm//. -LilPucca

//o...k... this is strange. what is the crazy taxi all about??? other than that it is kinda sweet or sth. whatever...//-Dusk-

the most attractive(?) poem here!! it's so funny and weird... and i don't get this so well... -Bear-

V.
I'm nothing without you HWC

O my luve’s like a sweet candy That makes me to keep ever. O my luve’s like a clear glass That’s the purest thing to me.

You are the one, who makes me feel, What real love is like. I will luve you ever, my Dear Till my death comes to me.

Till my death comes to me, my Dear And the sun rises in the west. I will luve you ever, my Dear, While the sunlight go out of sight.

And cherish you, my only Luve! And cherish you, forever And I’ll be always with you, my Luve No matter what happens to me.

//__Comments: __// //This poem is very sweet but I can't find any rhyme scheme here. The rhythm matches "Red, Red Rose" but there's no rhyme. Other than that, it's a good poem. ^^;;// -LilPucca

//Umm... your poem does not ryhme~ Remember, it was suppose to be like: a, b, c, b. But the context is quite okay...// -Pebbles

VI.
//The Meaning of Love //MJH

Oh my love is the perfect one, From him I learn to live. Love's a mystery, my honey, it's also sensitve

For all eternity I'll be With you atop the sea. I'll help you rule the earth, my dear, Of course you need your queen.

What's the meaning of love, my dear, The same of that of life? I don't know the meaning my love, my dear, But it gives me much strife.

Oh my love's the perfect love, All day long it is strong. On our one wedding day, my love, Pledge I won't do you wrong

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VII.
//A bright bright sun //HJJ

Oh my luve's like a bright bright sun, That's daily arise in day: O my luve's like the snow That's sweetly melt in ray.

As Luve is always hard To withstand all of the hardness, But I will still luve you, my dear. Till I sleep in the ground forever

Till I sleep for ever my dear, And the all the things will change But I will still luve you my dear, Though everything in world changes

And let's just keep this on step by step for our eternity luve And I will take care of you my luve Though it might be hard

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VIII.

 * Turtle had a little love(By.HWK)**

Turtle had a little love Little sox little love Turtle had a little love Little turtle love

Turtle had a pretty girl Pretty sox pretty girl Turtle had a pretty girl Pretty turtle girl

Turtle was a little boy Little egg little boy Turtle was a little boy Little turtle boy

Turtle was a charming guy Charming guy charming guy Turtle was a charming guy Charming little guy

Turtle had a little love Pretty girl beautiful girl Turtle had a little girl Little turtle girl

Turtle fell in little love Little love little love Turtle fell in pretty love Beautiful turtle’s love

//__Comments: __// -haha! i think i know who u mean by turtle!! this poem is quite funny^^ but it's not composed of 4 stanzas. y? -huiyuanne!-

IX.
//A Colorful Rainbow// HRL

Oh my Luve's like a colorful rainbow, Right after a heavy rain: O my Luve's like the rhythm Of an on going train.

So light I feel- like flying, So gay I feel inside; I'm willing to spend my lifetime, With you I'll take a ride.

Eyes shaped like almonds, Nowhere else does it exist: You are like a hundred diamonds That I would never resist.

You are sly like a snake, you hiss Have we even, ever kissed? O for once and all, just a kiss Or you shall never be dismissed.

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This poem sounds really sweet, and romatic. this poem has correct poetic structure which makes this poem interesting. - Hyunshin S2

X.
//An Utter Fool// By JYP

My love is like a flowing stream That will keep flowing until it dries. For thousand years I may deem For my love which became a dream.

There’s five stepping stones, But it does not reach across What a pain in my chest But still I would do my best.

I was driven by call of your love, with this bare foot and hand but what makes you hesitate to repond to my demand.

Forsake of what would you turn your mind. Staying here is what I can do And shout out my love like an utter fool But this is really what I will do.

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XI.
The white teddy bear by K_A_R

O my love is like a white teddy bear easy to love, easy to hold i always seek for you i promise you'll never be sold

my love for you is oh so real but with love comes heart breaks and the pain we feel will never heal with you gone i'll hurt more than you'll ever know

walking on a beach holding hands sitting together watching the sunset making hearts for you in the sand while sending you kisses

walking on water is a miracle my love for you is like walking on water this love in my heart is playing lyrical but forever you'll be my valentine

//__Comments: __// This poem is, in personal opinion, is mediocre (to be blunt). The rhyming scheme from the original 'Red Red Rose' was only followed partially; also the amount of syllables that per line are generally varied and show no consistency. Although, on that note, the words used do bring out images relevant to the topic, and the words are 'heart felt'.

Over all, I believe it to be sufficient in terms of the criteria being met; however one should look pass expectation.

Harsh and unfriendly Tiel,

This poem is so cute and romantic. i like the word that she choose to be in the poem - Hyunshin S2

XII.
A Distortion of A Poem By Ness S.

My love is like a well worn knife So thickly drenched in blood These spiteful words do pierce my heart From there my tears do flood.

Upon his face lie stone cold eyes, And perfect, porcelain skin. But I have known for far too long, It's but a mask worn thin.

Yet, I name him now, mine to love, And I am his to hate. For this damned spirit, I do adore, And thus remains my fate.

So if my love, was such a rose, A pure and perfect red. Before long, it would rot. For within, It was already dead.

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XIII.
My Gentleman SMS

O my Luve’s like a light, red sky That’s slowly go up over hill: O my Luve’s like the flower That’s straightly stand still.

As thou rise, my gentleman, I always think of u; And I won’t move, my Dear, Even wind blows too.

Even wind blows on me, my Dear, And the lightning flashed And I won’t move, my Dear, While the earth destroyed and died.

Then I say good-bye, my only Luve! And meet at the heaven And I will luve again, my Luve, Let’ see you now and then!

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XIV.
Thinking of you HMS

O my Luve’s like a deep darkness, I had to stay without a fun O my Luve’s like a dark night, I will go when things are done.

Sometimes, I feel like crying, When I think you will leave. I really miss you, I wish you stay with me without leave

I will give this love to you Take your darkest night, And make it bright for you. You can feel my love, right?

I will love you forever There is no way to wait you, I’m, still loving you My love will continue ever.

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- It's good except I just can't find rhyme going here. anyways... i like it ^♡^ - huiyuanne! -

XV.
Magical Love O my love is like fireworks, That brightens up the night. O my luve's like pink peonies, That blossoms day and night.

Your love's completely magical, Sending chills down my spine. Making me feel utterly loved I'm gald that you are mine.

Every minute, my beloved, Loving you with all my heart. Forever and always, my love Love you like piece of art.

Surrendering to you, my love Is what I can't control. Loving you forever, my love Is what you love to know.

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XVI.
Blue alone Oh my luve’s like dead blue rose That only I know what it feels Luve is nothing like a blue rose alone It’s like I am the only one alive

I don’t know who you are But my life relies on you No matter where you hide I will always wait for you

No matter what luves take I will never give up No matter how much luves hurt I will try and continue

Why is it that you never show I never see what you want Why chance is never on me for you I am easy to find just to tell you blue

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XVII.
I am here, for you by HSY

O my luve's like a red bright sun That shined through my mind. O my luv'es like a red and rose that fades away the fears on my mind

i can't live without you can you hear the beat? that are beating so hard for you so deep into my mind

untill the day i have i will show you all my heart full of confidence and brave that are wating for you, sweet heart

and you will see me with love and give me the heart with smile and we will together fall in love i will always make you smile

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